I like how you start with a screen filled with windows, I think that is a good lead in for the piece. I am kind of wondering about the ending. It seems a little abrupt - I guess I'm not sure if your piece is supposed to be simply facts, or trying to say whether the amount of internet use is good or bad. Or making a comment that teens spend too much time? maybe make more clear with something after the teen stat? Also, wondering about the color choices? The brownish-tan palette doesn't seem to go with the "i"s in the clock, maybe try to compliment each other better. Also, is there supposed to be rectangles around the pink "i"s in the clock? Also, the text feels kind of scrunched in some places, like the "average teen and adult spending" line could have a little more breathing room from the top of the screen. Also wondering, when the "i"s start to fill up the screen, will it be one at a time quickly? or small incriminates or increase? Wondering what kind of music you were thinking of using?
I like how you start with a screen filled with windows, I think that is a good lead in for the piece.
ReplyDeleteI am kind of wondering about the ending. It seems a little abrupt - I guess I'm not sure if your piece is supposed to be simply facts, or trying to say whether the amount of internet use is good or bad. Or making a comment that teens spend too much time? maybe make more clear with something after the teen stat?
Also, wondering about the color choices? The brownish-tan palette doesn't seem to go with the "i"s in the clock, maybe try to compliment each other better. Also, is there supposed to be rectangles around the pink "i"s in the clock?
Also, the text feels kind of scrunched in some places, like the "average teen and adult spending" line could have a little more breathing room from the top of the screen.
Also wondering, when the "i"s start to fill up the screen, will it be one at a time quickly? or small incriminates or increase?
Wondering what kind of music you were thinking of using?